I need your feedback Please answer them. This can be for were cat fic or Sonja fic. If you don't answer I will Not update them anymore.(meaning I'll Private this diary and it will only be for me)
Beginning
The first phrase in a story should be like a hook that grabs the reader's attention and interest. Is this the case here? Do you want to read more?
Conflict
Can you see any conflict in the story? Conflict can be either inner-conflict or outer-conflict.
Inner conflict:
When different values, wishes and desires are at war within the character's own mind. These can be, for example: greed, duty, fear, lust, revenge and love.
Outer conflict:
When the longings/needs of different characters clash together.
Plot
Is the plot clear and believable? Do you get answears to all the questions that arise in your mind as you read the story?
Setting
Can you pictures the setting in the story? Are there vivid descriptions? Are all five senses, smell, sight, hearing and touch, used?
Character Development
Do you sympathize with the main character? Do you care what happens to her? Is she believable and seems "alive"? Does the author tell you what she does for a living, what her interests are, if she has family of friends and what she cares about? Does the character change during the course of the story or does he remain the same?
Conversation
Are the conversations in the story believable? Can you "hear" them? Is there enough of them? Are they used to push the story along? Do they describe the characters' attitudes and abilities?
Verbs
Is the author consistent in his verb use or does he roam between present tense and past tense? Could the author simplify his verb use? Are the verbs dynamic (powerful, descriptive) or are they neutral and don't really say much?
Adjectives
Are they neutral and descriptive or value-laden and general? Are there too many or too few adjectives?
Point of View
What is the POV in the story? Is the author consistent in its use? Is the POV working? Could another POV be better for the story? Should there be one or more?
Show, don't tell.
Does the author show you what happens, instead of telling you?
Layout
Is the layout of the text acceptable, making it easy tor ead? Does the author use paragraph breaks or is the text just a one big lump?
Moral Message
Is there a moral to the story? Do you feel that one character, or more, are in fact speaking for the author?
Language
What do you think of the language? Is it good? Is there slang or any words you don't comprehend? Is it too formal, or maybe not formal enough? Do you see any cliches? Is his choice of words good or are the same terms and words used over and over again? Does the author repeat himself?
Style
Is there a certain style of writing in the story? How do you like it? Is the style "broken" somewhere, that is, a part of the story written in a totally different style than the rest of the text?
Overall impression
What impression, if any, did the story have on you?
Spelling
Were there many spelling problems, any specific and recurrent? Did the spelling distract you from the story? Be constructive or you'll be blocked
Other
Any ohter comments or suggestions you'll like to tell me anything that is consrctive.
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